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Post by lilmissranduum on Aug 29, 2009 19:25:54 GMT -5
Great chapter CC!! please post the next chapter soon! ;D
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Post by carcrasher88 on Sept 2, 2009 10:27:32 GMT -5
Ok, here's chapter 4! I'm not sure how often I'll be able to update since I'm going back to school tomorrow. Hopefully, I'll be able to update often, though. This chapter isn't as "upper-scale", as I like to call it, as the others. In fact, this is a nice, short and sweet chapter. Enjoy!!!
Chapter 4
“It's A Family Thing”
(At the treedome...)
“Hello?” Sandy says, into the phone.
“Well, if it isn't my favorite daughter! How are things going with you and your new boyfriend?” Sandy's mom asks.
“Well...I wasn't feeling good yesterday, so I went to the doctor, and he ran some tests...I've got some news for you?” Sandy hesitates.
“What is it?” Her mom asks, worried.
“I'm gonna be a mom.” Sandy responded.
“Ohhhhh....My baby's gonna have one of her own! Did you hear that, Helen? Your niece is gonna have a baby!” (In the background) “That's great to hear, Carrie! Tell her that I wish her luck!” (On the phone) “Did you hear that, Sandy. Aunt Helen wishes you luck with the child, ok?”
“Tell her I said thanks.” Sandy said, no longer worried.
“I will. I almost forgot! Pa and I, along with some of your other relatives, are coming to town next week, thanks to those pills you sent us.” Carrie told Sandy.
“Really, you got them already?” Sandy asked, surprised.
“Yep. The mail system you folks have down there is really fast!” Carrie responded.
“Wow! That's good. I'll see you next week!” Sandy finished, and hung up.
(In town)
“Ok, Patrick. Where should I go to buy a ring? There's so many jewelry stores around, and I don't want to break the bank.” Spongebob explained to his best friend.
“How about there?” Patrick pointed to a shop that said “Jeff's Fine refurbished used jewelry”.
“Great idea, Pat! They probably have something cheap.” Spongebob said, excited.
They walk inside.
(Meanwhile, at the Krusty Krab...)
“I should call Spongebob. If he's buying a ring, I should tell him where to get a good, honest deal.” Mr. Krabs said to himself. He picks up the phone.
(Back at Jeff's)
(Spongebob's cell phone rings)
“Yello, you've got Spongebob.” He answered.
“Where are you, boy?” Mr. Krabs asked.
“Jeff's Fine refurbished used jewelry, sir.” Spongebob answered.
“Get out of there, boy. Jeff's a ripoff artist! I should know.” Mr. Krabs said with a deeper voice.
“What happened?” Spongebob asked, curiously.
“No time to explain. Go down the street to a place called “Bikini Bottom Fine Jewelry”. Tell them Mr. Krabs sent ya!” Mr. Krabs told Spongebob.
“I'm on it, Mr. Krabs!” He hangs up.
(Back at the Krusty Krab)
“There. As long as he doesn't tell them to put it on my tab! (laughs) Oh, boy. Spongebob is one lucky boy, Mr. Squidward. Maybe he can help you find someone.”
“I'm sure he can, sir.” Squidward responded, sarcastically.
(Back at the treedome...again...)
“I haven't seen Spongebob around for a while. I wonder what he's up to.” Sandy says. She thinks to herself. “Maybe he's at Jellyfish Fields with Patrick. Or down at the beach.” She imagines herself on the beach with Spongebob, holding hands, watching the sunset. “Maybe I'll ask him if he wants to go there tonight.”
Then, Sandy looks over to the door of the treedome. There, she sees a green box. She walks over to it, and picks it up.
“Now where did this come from?” Sandy asked to herself. Then, she sees a tag. She reads it. “To Sandy, the most beautiful girl I've ever met, and the love of my life. From Spongebob.” She opens the box. Inside, there's a heart shaped picture frame. In the frame, is a picture of the two of them at Jellyfish fields on a sunny day. Also in the box was a gold necklace with an acorn shaped pendant.
“Oh...this is beautiful!” She says as she puts it around her neck. “That little sponge is SO sweet! There's gotta be some way to thank him, but how?”
End Chapter 4
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Post by lilmissranduum on Sept 2, 2009 11:19:04 GMT -5
LMR: Once again CC, Great chapter! As always, please update soon! Good luck at your first day of school tomorrow!
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Post by carcrasher88 on Sept 2, 2009 13:50:53 GMT -5
Thanks! I just might have the next chapter done in a little bit! I'll post it when I'm done!
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Post by lilmissranduum on Sept 2, 2009 14:04:10 GMT -5
Okay! ^^ I keep checkin'! ;D
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Post by carcrasher88 on Sept 2, 2009 15:46:45 GMT -5
Chapter 5 is done. In this one, we meet the folks, and the big moment happens! Prepare for conflict, though. This should be good!
Chapter 5
“Here goes everything...”
(1 week later...)
Spongebob was sitting at home, in the kitchen. Patrick was in the living room, watching the “coconut” with Gary. Sandy's parents and relatives were coming in an hour. He was extremely nervous because he was planning on asking Sandy to marry him tonight, but with the sudden news that her relatives were coming TODAY made him quite uneasy. He picked up the little black box and held it in his hands.
“Oh, dear Neptune. I'm not sure if I can do this...I've waited so long, and now I'm not sure if I can do this. What if I embarrass myself in front of her family. They'd never let me live it down. I mean, they're from Texas! (And New York, Florida, California, Kentucky and New Jersey, as a matter of fact.)” Spongebob said to himself, starting to shake in fear.
Patrick walks in.
“You want to come in and watch the coconut? It might get your mind off of this.” Patrick asked, trying to help.
“Sure. I'm really nervous.” They walk to the living room.
(Meanwhile, at the treedome...)
Sandy was in her room, getting ready to introduce her friends to the folks. Along with her parents, Carrie and Joe, her aunt Helen was coming, along with her cousins Erin, Jack, Ricky, and Sam. It would be like a little family reunion. Sort of...except for one little detail...
She put on the necklace her boyfriend gave her and looked at the photo that came with it. She sighed and thought of how her relatives would think of him. She needed to be careful, though. Back in the 8th grade, her cousin Erin ended up stealing Sandy's former boyfriend, right in front of her. Since then, she never got over it. Erin dumped him 2 months later for someone else. Erin was always a heartbreaker. Sandy didn't want her stealing Spongebob from her, too.
Jack is a bit of a gearhead. At the age of 12, he repaired his first carburetor and intake manifold. Now, at age 27, he's one of the most trusted mechanics in northern New Jersey.
Ricky, at the age of 16, is kind of the Ricky Carmichael of the family. It's quite the coincidence that they share the same first name. At 11, he got his first motorcross bike, since then, he's been a master at riding those things.
Lastly, there's Sam. She's more like Sandy than anyone else in the family. Brains and looks, she's just like her cousin. But, the difference that they have compared to other identical cousins, is the fact that these two never had a rivalry, and have gotten along all their lives. Sandy was looking forward to seeing her more than any of her other cousins.
“Well, it's almost time. I better go get Spongebob.” Sandy said as she put the picture back on the dresser. She walked out to her green Jeep and drove off.
(Back at the pineapple...)
“Oh boy, it's time. Sandy should be here soon to pick us up. I'm still a bit nervous, Patrick.” Spongebob told his best friend, being as honest as possible.
“Don't worry. You'll do fine. Let's get ready.” Patrick responded, optimistically.
“You're right. I can't wait to meet Sandy's family. I wonder what they're like!” Spongebob finally cheered up, thinking about Sandy's family, instead of his plans.
They walk outside, and hear a horn. Then, they see Sandy pulling up in her green Jeep Wrangler Unlimited.
“Y'all ready to go?” Sandy asked them.
“Yeah!” Patrick yelled.
They got in the truck.
Sandy looked over at Spongebob.
“Are you ok, Spongebob?” She asked, concerned.
“Uh...yeah! I'm...(coughs)...fine. (laughs nervously)” Spongebob responds.
“You don't seem ok. Are you sure?” Sandy was really starting to worry now.
“Yeah...Hey! Is that the necklace I left at your place for you?” Spongebob tried to change the subject.
“Yeah! I love it. Just like I love you, Spongebob.” She gave him a kiss on the cheek.
“No problem!” That was all Spongebob could say before Patrick started laughing. They looked back at him.
“What? I thought it was funny.” Patrick said. Spongebob and Sandy looked at each other and Spongebob shrugged his shoulders.
Finally, they arrived...
They pulled up next to a silver 2010 Chevrolet Equinox. A 27 year-old squirrel wearing carpenter jeans and a blue Chevrolet T-shirt with oil stains on it rushed to the Jeep and opened the hood out of instinct.
“Jack, I already checked the truck before I left.!” Sandy yelled at him, jokingly.
“Don't mind him. He's got what I call “Compulsory Check Engine Light Disorder” or CCELD, for short. Being a mechanic, he thinks every car he sees has something wrong with it. He did the same thing to the Equinox. We told him it was brand new, and there was nothing wrong with it.” A female squirrel, the same age as Sandy, looking almost the same, aside from the yellow skirt and chocolate brown tank top, explained.
“Well, try to keep him under control, Sam.” Sandy responded, laughing.
“Will do!” said Sam.
Then, a 16 year-old squirrel wearing blue jeans and a green t-shirt pulled out his Honda CRF250 R from the back of the Chevrolet.
“What do you think, Sandy?” He asked.
“Pretty cool, Ricky. You still planning on going pro?” Sandy asked, curiously.
“Sure am!” Ricky responded.
“Well, well, well. If it isn't my cousin Sandy.” Said a tall female squirrel, also the same age as Sandy, wearing a green t-shirt, faded blue jeans, and a green ribbon on her head.
“Come to steal another one of my boyfriends, Erin?” Sandy responded, a glare in her eyes.
“We'll see, Sandra. We'll see...” Erin responded as she walked past, nearly knocking Sandy over.
“Oh yeah? Well, this isn't the eighth grade, FYI! I'm a lot tougher now.” Sandy barked at her cousin.
Erin turned around.
“Oh yeah? I could knock your little chestnut brown hide back to Texas right now, if I wanted to!” She said, literally, in her face.
“You couldn't even beat a pebble compared to me. I've practiced my karate.” Sandy responded.
“You've practiced martial arts? Fascinating!” said Sam.
“Yep. Just ask him.” Sandy pointed to Spongebob.
“Oh, this your boyfriend?” Erin said with a grin. “Nice to meet ya. I look forward to getting to know you.” She said to Spongebob, with a look in her eye that made Spongebob even more nervous than before.
“You better stop, Erin, before you make him a nervous wreck.” said Jack.
“Oh, yeah? Whatcha gonna do about it, gearhead?” She yelled at him.
“I'll shove you in the trunk of a rusty old Cadillac, lock the trunk, and leave you there!” Jack responded.
“This is gonna be more trouble than I thought!” Spongebob thought to himself. “I better steer clear of her.”
“Hey, you guys get along now! I ain't afraid to arrest my own family members!” A tall squirrel, wearing leather boots, a blue shirt, blue overcoat and blue slacks with a gold police badge yelled at them. “Except you, Sandy. I wouldn't do that to my own daughter.” He said, putting his arm around her.
“Oh, come on, Joe. Just because you're member of the county sheriff's department back home, doesn't mean you can be like this to you're own family.” A female squirrel wearing a blue dress said to him.
“You're right, Carrie. I was being a little hard on them.” Joe responded.
“Sheesh! You guys are jumpier than two kangaroos at a hopping contest!” Another female squirrel, wearing a green t-shirt, denim jeans and a western hat sand to everyone.
“Ok, ok. We get you, Helen.” Joe added.
“What? It's true!” Helen responded.
“So?” Joe responded, again.
“Whatever.” Helen said, frustrated. “And you, young lady.” She turned to Erin. “You've gotta be nicer to your cousins. They're family!”
“Yes, mom.” Erin said with her head down.
“Good.” She turned to Spongebob and Patrick. “You must be the two guys I've heard about, Spongebob and Patrick, right?”
They both nodded.
“Well, nice to meet ya!” They shook hands. “Spongebob. I just met you, and I'm already proud of you. You must be proud of Sandy. I mean, with her getting ready to have that baby, and all.”
“Yeah...(laughs nervously)” Spongebob responded.
“Well, let's get going!” Sandy said.
“Wait!” Spongebob yelled. “I've got something to say. Sandy, all my life, I've been looking for someone that I could care about. When we met, I realized that I've found what I was looking for. Someone who'd be there for me. Someone I could spend the rest of my life with. I...guess what I'm trying to say is...” He reaches into his pocket and pulls out the black box. He opens in, revealing a platinum ring with a large diamond on it. “Sandy, will you marry me?”
Tears started to fill Sandy's eyes. She didn't see this coming.
“Spongebob, I....yes! I will!” She grabbed the ring, put it on her finger and grabbed Spongebob. Then, she moved in and kissed him on the lips, in front of everyone else.
“Awww.....” everyone exclaimed, except Erin, who was plotting a way to steal him from her cousin.
End Chapter 5
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Post by Jingle on Sept 2, 2009 17:22:39 GMT -5
Awesome chapter! I would've read it sooner but I've been really busy.
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Post by lilmissranduum on Sept 2, 2009 19:10:06 GMT -5
Amazing chapter! I can't wait for the next one! Keep up the great work!! xD
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Post by carcrasher88 on Sept 3, 2009 17:04:19 GMT -5
Ok, here's chapter 6! It's a bit different from any story chapter I've ever written. It's a lot more dramatic, but I hope it's still ok. Anyway, here it is!!!
Chapter 6
“There's a Storm 'a Brewin'!”
Later that night, the gang's guests were settling in at the hotel they were staying at. Well...all but one.
“Hehehe! Oh, Spongy. You will be mine!” A dark figure said with a bright red grin.
In the morning, at Spongebob's pineapple..
“Hey, Spongebob! Wanna go watch me tear up some sand dunes on my dirt bike?” Ricky asked.
“Sure! I have some time before going to work!” Spongebob responded.
“But...it's Saturday!” Patrick stated as he walked in.
“Oh yeah! Mr. Krabs gave me the weekend off!” Spongebob remembered the break his boss gave him.
“Then let's go!” Ricky yelled as he ran outside.
Later, at the sand dune field..
“Ha! I knew they'd be here! Now, to wait for my chance! (laughs evil-like)” The dark figure said, hiding behind a billboard.
“Yeehaw!” Ricky screamed as he took a jump.
“Wow, that looks dangerous. I couldn't do that kind of stuff.” Spongebob thought to himself, although he thought is was cool.
Suddenly, Spongebob felt a shaking of the ground. Then, the ground below him collapsed.
Then, all he could hear was..
“Ha! I've finally got you where I want you!” The dark figure said to him. He looked around, seeing that he was in an underground cave. “You thought you could get away from me, didn't you?”
“Who are you and what do you want me for?” Spongebob asked, scared.
“Who am I?” The dark figure stepped into the light. The first thing he recognized was the green ribbon.
“It's you! Um..I forgot, who are you again?” Spongebob questioned.
“What?! You're the first person to ever forget my name! Ok, now you're making me question why I'm doing this.” She responded.
“Then let me go!” Spongebob demanded.
“Never! You're mine and there's nothing anyone can do about it! HA!!!” She yelled.
“Spongebob? Are you down there?” Ricky yelled down the hole.
“Hey! How about you shut up, pipsqueak!” She yelled back.
“What the?! Erin? Is that you down there?” Ricky asked, confused.
“Yeah!” Erin responded.
“Wait until your mom and Sandy hear what you've done!” Ricky yells before riding off.
“When I get my hands on that little twerp, he's dead! No matter, they aren't gonna be able to get us down here! Face it, Spongy! You're mine now!” Erin said, leaning towards Spongebob's face.
“You're not gonna get away with this, or me!” Spongebob said back.
“We'll see about that!” Erin said, leaning even closer. Then, she gets hit by a falling rock.
“Thought you could steal Spongebob from me, didn't you?” A voice said.
“Sandy! Help!” Spongebob yelled.
“Hold on! I'm on my way down.” Sandy said as she jumped down. Then, she opened a parachute. She floated down next to Spongebob. “Let's get out of here!” She said.
“Wait! What about her?” Spongebob pointed at Erin, still knocked out.
“Forget her. We need to find an exit!” Sandy said, still angry at her cousin.
After they leave, Erin suddenly wakes up again.
“(growls).. She may be my cousin, but she's so DEAD!” She yells.
Later, back at the pineapple..
“Ok, that was CLOSE!!!!” Spongebob screams as he enters with Sandy.
“I can't believe it! My own cousin, AGAIN! Once a backstabber, always a backstabber!” Sandy exclaimed.
“Don't worry! She probably won't remember a thing!” Spongebob said, trying to calm Sandy down.
“HA! Think again!” Erin yelled maniacally as she busted through the door.
“You're not getting your hands on him again, Erin!” Sandy said.
“Oh yeah?” She randomly pulls out a loaded pistol.
“NO!!!” Spongebob yelled.
Just as Erin was about to shoot, she fell to the ground. Spongebob walked over to find out that she was hit with a tranquilizer dart.
“Where did this come from?” Spongebob asked.
“I shot it.” said Jack.
“Wow! Thanks, Jack! We owe you one.” Sandy said as she ran up to hug her cousin. Spongebob did the same.
Then, Helen ran over to them.
“What's all of the commotion here?” she asked.
“I had to use the dart on Erin. She tried to shoot Sandy so she could get Spongebob.” Jack explained.
“What?! I can't believe it! Why would she do such a thing?” Helen asked.
“I can explain.” said Sam. “Erin has always been jealous of Sandy. She stole her boyfriend in the eighth grade. Now, she wanted Spongebob, just as he asked Sandy to marry him. I couldn't find her last night. That was, until I looked out of my hotel room window and saw her loading the pistol. I knew something was awry. Why would she have a pistol, and, more importantly, what was she gonna use it for? Then, I spied her at the sand dune field where Spongebob and Ricky were. She had set some explosives in a circle, and buried them. She must have knew there was a cave underneath. Spongebob walked over there, and she detonated the explosives. The ground collapsed and he fell through. Then, Ricky found me. He told me what happened. Then, I went to find Jack. That was when we found her attacking them. He grabbed the dart and threw it. Perfect shot! Now, she's out cold, and won't wake up for a few hours. By then, she'll be in handcuffs and hauled to the police station.”
“Well I'll be! You guys did a great job! I'm proud of you all!” They all gathered in a group hug.
End Chapter 6
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Post by Jingle on Sept 3, 2009 22:06:09 GMT -5
It's awesome! ... again! Just one thing for the future, you might wanna make sure she goes to a prison on land. I'm not critizing, just helping. Good chapter though!
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Post by lilmissranduum on Sept 3, 2009 22:36:08 GMT -5
I know I'm probably sounding like a broken record but... That was a great chapter CC! Can't wait for the next one!
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Post by carcrasher88 on Sept 4, 2009 14:52:31 GMT -5
Thanks again! I've set up a plan for the rest of the story. Well, at least the release of the remaining chapters. Here's the run down.
Tonight - Chapter 7
Saturday - Chapters 8 and 9
Sunday - Chapters 10 and 11
Monday - Chapters 12 and 13 (final chapter)
Basically, that means that the story isn't even half way over!
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Post by Jingle on Sept 4, 2009 16:01:33 GMT -5
Wow, I thought you were exaggerating when you said you had a lot of time on your hands! Even when I hadn't started shcool yet, I still couldn't hardly find the time for writing. I'm gonna have to work on my stories over Labor day weekend!
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Post by carcrasher88 on Sept 4, 2009 16:10:30 GMT -5
(looks over with a glare in my eyes) I never exaggerate! NEVER!! (lol)
Seriously, though, I really don't exaggerate, like, ever! I can't wait to see what you do! I'm really looking forward to it!
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Post by carcrasher88 on Sept 4, 2009 17:00:37 GMT -5
Sorry for the double post, but I've finished chapter 7! It's a bit graphic, and I hope its not too over the edge. Anyways, here it is!
Chapter 7
“The Struggle at the KK”
(2 hours later, at a gas station somewhere north of Bikini Bottom..)
A black police Ford Crown Victoria sits at the gas pump. Erin is in the back with one officer in the car. The other one is in the mini-mart. Just then, she wakes up..
“Where am I?” she asks.
“You're in the back of a cop car. You're under arrest.” The officer responds.
“For what?” Erin asked, confused.
“Quite the list. Attempted murder, kidnapping, damage to private property and illegal possession of a firearm.” The cop explained.
“Oh.” was all she could say. Then, she realized something. There was a screw missing in the metal divider between the seats. She undid the other one on the other side. She removed it.
“What do you think you're doing?” the officer asked.
“Making my escape. I've got unfinished business to take care of.” she said in a slightly deeper voice. Then, she kicked the back of the front passenger seat, slamming the officer into the dashboard. She repeated, triggering the airbag. The officer went face first into it, knocking him unconscious.
“Ha! You couldn't hold me for long!” She said as she grabbed the key to the handcuffs. Then, she grabbed the assault rifle, the officer's pistol and threw him out of the car. Then, she hotwired the car while the other officer was inside, shooting the breeze with the lady at the deli counter, unaware of the situation until she drove away.
(Meanwhile, at the Krusty Krab..)
“Well, I'm glad that's over!” Said Spongebob, eating a Krabby Patty.
“Yeah, so am I! Now we can focus on other important things!” Sandy added, also eating a patty.
“Ain't that the truth!” said Mr. Krabs, as he walked over to the two.
Then, they noticed a black Crown Victoria police car pull up. But, they didn't see a driver, and the airbags had deployed. There was something strange going on, and Spongebob was concerned.
“Bang!” There was a gunshot, it hit the window of the Krusty Krab, shattering it. Everyone ducked for cover.
Then, they noticed someone walking inside.
“You guys can't keep me down for long now, can you?” Erin yelled, as she started pointing her rifle at a table.
“Not again!” Spongebob yelled, revealing his location. She started shooting. They thought they were safe behind the table they tipped over, but they weren't!
There was a scream that could be heard. Spongebob looked to his right and saw that one of the bullets almost hit it's mark, hitting Sandy in the shoulder.
“Sandy! NO!” Spongebob screamed.
“(groans in pain) Don't worry, I'll be ok.” Sandy reassures him.
“You sure?” Spongebob asked, tears in his eyes.
“Yes.” Sandy responded.
“Ok. If you say so.” Spongebob said before sneaking his way over to the register, where Mr. Krabs was preparing his weapon, a small harthingy.
“Spongebob, if this goes wrong, I'm taking her out..for good!” Mr. Krabs said, furiously.
“Don't worry, that won't be necessary.” Spongebob said.
“We'll see.” Mr. Krabs wasn't backing down. Remember, he was in the navy.
“Mr. Krabs, she's shooting up the place! We need to get out of here!” Squidward could be heard saying from inside the kitchen.
Another scream. This time, Sandy was hit in the foot.
“That's it! I'm going for the shot!” Mr. Krabs yelled. He aimed his launcher at Erin, ready to fire. Then, he saw Jack sneaking behind her with a shotgun.
“Ok, that'll be enough trouble from you!” He said, pointing the gun at her head.
“You can't stop me, no matter what you do! (laughs maniacally)” She says, revealing that she's crazy.
“That's a risk I'm willing to take.” He pulls the trigger, and she falls to the floor, revealing another dart.
“Wait? Another dart?” Spongebob asked, confused.
“Yeah, did you really cut my own cousin's life short?” Jack asked.
“I guess not.” Spongebob responded. He looked over at Sandy, seeing the mess before him. Her clothes were stained, and she looked weak. They had to call an ambulance, immediately. Fortunately, Mr. Krabs already did! The ambulance arrived shortly.
“By the way, that dart is a lot more powerful. She'll be out of it for a few days. They'll have her in jail in Texas by morning.” Jack added.
“Jack? Is Sandy going to be ok?” Spongebob asked, with tears in his eyes again.
“Of course! She's a tough squirrel, she'll pull through.” Jack reassured Spongebob.
“I hope you're right.” Spongebob said, as he watched Sandy being loaded into the ambulance and Erin being loaded into a police truck.
End Chapter 7
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